CLASS 18: THU OCT 31

Housekeeping

About half of you have posted a Writing Plan without asking for feedback. That shows tremendous confidence or a nervousness about seeking feedback. I currently have an open queue waiting for anyone who wants help with turning your Writing Plan into an Op-Ed by THU NOV 07. Get in line now to beat the rush.

Riddle

In which we complete the first of more than a dozen Copy Edit This! quizzes from the editors of the New York Times.

Halloween Mask

Our LTE on Booing the President

In which we discover how quickly we need to respond to a news item to make it onto the Letters page. I need your Reply to the post.

A Little Quiz

On danglers and other misplaced or misused modifiers.

Lecture/Demo: Connecting Claims

A brief demonstration of how to achieve higher Grade Levels by recognizing claims, stating them clearly, and connecting them into sentences that function like small arguments.

Choc Brussels Sprouts

Non-Portfolio Task:
Connecting Claims Exercise

In which you get a chance to demonstrate your skill at Connecting Claims.

Portfolio Task for THU NOV 07:
Op-Ed Draft

Before we finalize your Editorial for Portfolio, we’re going to get a good start on your Op-Ed, the third major essay destined for your portfolio.

23 Responses to CLASS 18: THU OCT 31

  1. tenere84 says:

    Notes 10/31

    Riddle: professional writers often make mistakes too; they are just not as noticeable to the naked eye. In the quiz, it was surprisingly hard for me to find the errors in their sentences.E Such errors ranged from simple redundancies to misplaced modifiers.

    “He/she” is a subject. “him/her” is an object.
    When to use who or whom:
    – “who” is also a subject, and “whom” is also an object. If replacing one of the two words with “he/she” sounds right, it is supposed to be who. If it sounds correct with “him/her,” it should be whom.

    Connecting claims:
    – An essay may be filled with correctly written declarations and void of grammatical errors, but fail at guiding the reader through.
    – Readers should not have to do all the work.
    – All claims made in an essay must connect and have chemistry with each other. They must all prove the primary claim while also guiding the reader, without giving them unnecessary burdens, to the end of the writing.

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  2. Valcom says:

    Notes 10/31/19
    -I was out of class this day but here are the notes I took based on what I read.
    [] The Op-Ed first draft is due Thursday Nov 7th.
    [] If you write the word “he” and it sounds correct then you can swap the word out with “who” and it will be the same.
    [] There are many words that are pronounced and look the same, but have very different meanings.
    [] The riddle looked like a grammar quiz, where you would need to catch spelling mistakes and common grammar mistakes.
    [] Connecting Claims
    -Make sure to always organize the claims stated.
    -When a writer or author breaks down a claim, the reader can see the bigger image or picture easier that that author is trying to explain.

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  3. comp0327 says:

    Notes 10/31 (They got deleted, I apologize.)
    -We completed the NYT editor’s sentences, which was interesting because I never realized how many grammatical errors get overlooked on an everyday basis.
    -We moved onto other grammatical misconceptions, such as who vs. whom, or writing digits vs. writing the word for a number.
    -We also looked at the letters to the editor in response to the ‘Trump got booed” article, and compared Professor Hodges’ LTE to the other two which were published. Personally, I thought Professor Hodges’ LTE was good enough to be published.
    -Connecting claims- When making a claim, use backup statements and sources to support this claim to assist your reader and make them believe and understand your claim better.
    -Op-ed due next Thursday.

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  4. lazybear8 says:

    Post Writing plan in feedback pls.
    Quiz
    Free gifts- gifts are implied to be free so “free gifts” is redundant.
    Who-he whom-him test.
    disperse should be disburse when talking about distributing money.
    No hyphen between six feet.
    LTE Trump Booed:
    The published writers are clear in their intent. There is no apology for how they feel and their feelings are clearly stated.
    Two Posts were published, one taking the side of the original author and one showing the other side of the argument, that of seeing the error in the op ed.
    Our credibility can be destroyed in the first paragraph if we use incorrect grammar. That is all we have.

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  5. – Riddle – small errors are made in ny times articles that are overlooked and made by professional writers.
    – If you replace the subject with “he” and it sounds right, then you can use “who”. If you can replace the subject with “him” and it sounds right, then use “whom”.
    – After double digits, you don’t write the numbers out.
    – Don’t just list your claims and go along with it when writing out an argument. State your stance from the jump and then use connected claims to make a strong argument.
    – OP-ED DRAFT DUE NOV. 7TH!!!

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  6. 10/31 Notes:
    – Modifiers–be careful where you place them, the noun that comes immediately after can confuse readers
    – We looked at various examples of incorrect sentences and phrases from the NYTimes article and found/corrected the grammatical problems. who/whom, making sentences in agreement
    -We moved onto asking ourselves what separated Dr. Hodge’s letter to the editor from the ones that had made it to the paper, and reviewed the elements of an effective Letter to the Editor.
    -The connecting claims exercise helps us to remember to coherently organize our claims in our writing. By breaking down each claim sentence by sentence, it helps us as writers to see a bigger picture in the work and to better visualize how to structure the claims.

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  7. lg102015 says:

    10/31 Notes
    Riddle: For today’s class we used a riddle to help up with our Letter to The Editor. We went over how the smallest grammar errors are truly overlooked in peoples writing. We were shown how even the slightest change can truly make a huge difference. We went over many examples of grammatical errors and corrected them as a class.
    Ex: Who and Whom: If you can replace the subject with “he” and it sounds right, then you can use who. If you can replace the subject with “him” and it sounds right, then you use whom.
    Letter to the Editor:
    We took a look at 2 letter to the editors that have been published about the situation of Trump being booed at the baseball game. We then looked at the article Professor Hodges came up with. From here we were told to comment if we feel it should be published or not. I feel as if out article was the best out of the three and was very well pit together.
    Connecting Claims exercise:
    When writing you should always states your claims clearly. Then after doing so, make sure you your sentences that are clear connect with your claims and keep everything together.

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  8. lucbe219 says:

    To start class, we began with a quiz riddle. We were trying to find a word that has a usage error, but are visualized as the same where sometimes it can be corrected by a hyphen or by removing one. The second question had a problem placing the subject of the sentence correctly. In grammar, a key trick when you’re not sure, always use who instead of whom. We quickly moved onto reading the professors LTE while commenting our opinions of it. Shortly after, we revised six sentences to correct their grammar skills. As an out of class assignment, we need to correct an example paragraph so that all of the claims being presented connect with each other into a concise paragraph.

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  9. voxpopuli75 says:

    10/31/19
    -OP:EDs should be on a recent topic that is in the news.
    – It is easier to use “who” then “whom” because it is harder to misuse “who”.
    – When writing down large numbers don’t write out the entire number in digits.
    EX: Use $150 Million Not $150,000,000
    – Disburse and disperse have different meanings. Disperse is to distribute while disburse means to pay out.
    – Use “as well as” if you already have used up “and” in your sequence.

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  10. jackso23 says:

    In today’s class:
    – We discussed asking for feedback or the lack thereof as apart of housekeeping
    – We went over different grammatical and spelling mistakes
    – How to use “whom” .. whom/him is objective while who/he is subjective.
    – We completed a short grammatical/editing quiz for the NY times
    – Both LTE Letters 2 & 3 are the best ones in my opinion. The first one is very opinion based which is fine but maybe a little too much. The author used I a lot instead to sticking to general observations to back up what they were saying. The last two got their point across while keeping (as I assume) personal views restricted.
    – We fixed sentences that had misplaced modifiers and other errors

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  11. mpsj13 says:

    Riddle
    -Style guides give the style and diction of works for a certain group such as the New York Times.
    *Ex: write one-nine and then use numerals.
    -A hyphen is needed between words when more than one word is used to modify a word
    *” I shot by my assault weapon” does not need a hyphen because assault is modifying weapon
    *” I voted for an assault-weapon ban” Both assault and weapon modify ban therefore a hyphen is needed.
    -Who and He are subjects and whom and him are objects. Use whom when the word can be replaced by him.
    -Use “both and” not “both as well as”
    *Use as well as when ands have been used up in a sentence: Earl grey, English Breakfast, and Oolong as well as coffee
    Connecting Claims
    -Connect claims into small one sentence arguments and use natural transitions to create a paragraph that guides the reader to take one’s view on an issue.

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  12. 10/31
    NOTES
    Riddle
    – Difference between a misspelled word and misused word
    – Subj: who/he = said Obj: whom/him = called
    – Lots of words have similar words that are pronounced the same, but have complete different meanings to make or break a sentence. If you use the wrong spelling of the word in a sentence and you may not have realized, but it could diminish the whole meaning of the sentence.
    – Similarly, some words are meant to be rotated in a sentence that would make that sentence more correct.
    – Little changes to a sentence by moving one piece of it to the front or back can make it much more clear.
    – Took a short quiz to change sentences for the better of their meaning
    – If you make your claims flow correctly it will make you paragraph much more understandable and easy to follow
    – State your claims and connect them!

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  13. bmdpiano says:

    NOTES:

    Riddle: Grammar Quiz
    -Catching the usage or spelling error
    -Cight, sight, site, and cite
    -One is a spelling error while the rest have different meanings and can be seen in a usage error.
    -I voted for an assault-weapon ban. The hyphen makes a single modifier rather than have two separate ideas.
    -The quiz shows many grammar errors that people can figure out how to fix. It represents many rules such as the ones shown above.
    -Who/whom is alike to he/him. If the sentence refers to he, use who and if the sentence refers to him, use whom.

    Our LTE:
    -Two LTE’s were already published, but was our LTE idea good enough to be published? I believe so. It is strong to the point with its opinion.

    Connecting Claims:
    -Connecting sentences and providing links to create fluid ideas.

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  14. ajuuy7 says:

    We took a grammar quiz that led us to identify words like assault weapons should get a hyphen when they are modifying a noun like ‘ban’. The phrase in the beginning of the sentence has to attach itself to what it modifies. If you can say the word “he” the correct term to use is who but if you can use the term “him” you should use whom. Use “as well as” after you use ‘and.’ We read a paragraph, identified and made better the claims, and then connected them. The new paragraph picks up claims and carries them to the next sentence.

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  15. kraemercali says:

    10/31/
    ask for feedback
    riddle
    quiz- edit the sentences with grammatical errors, correct them
    our oped on booing the president, read ones already published, was a good writing, interesting
    quiz on our own, correct 5 sentences in comment section of page
    oped draft due thurs nov 7
    connecting claims exercise

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  16. ahntkd99 says:

    10/31
    Riddle
    – A quiz is posted by the NY Times
    – It is test to check the grammar or usage
    – Who (subj) / Whom (obj)
    – He (subj) / Him (obj)
    Our LTE on Booing the President
    – Reply how you think our letter stacks up against the two selected for publication
    A Little Quiz
    – Your primary audience is readers who understand grammar
    – Copy and paste the sentences and edit or rewrite the sentences to correct any modifier errors you find
    Lecture/Demo: Connecting Claims

    In a Writing Tip called “Grade Levels,” it demonstrated how several individual related but unconnected claims can be connected with transitions and logic to guide readers through an argument

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  17. Today we are learning about spelling mistakes, word usage, how to fix it. Professor is teaching us how to spot out different errors by taking us to the new york times and having us take a test to understand the errors we see in these articles.

    Dont try to say something smart, thinking your right showing off, and be wrong doing it.
    disperse/disburse
    criteria/criterion
    data/datum
    Aid patients
    nurses aid

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  18. smellycat23 says:

    An op-ed responds to something recent and if a topic is chosen that is always available to discuss, you need an excuse for your writing. While looking at the NYT Insider, Iearned to always use who instead of whom because you’ll never look dumb for not using whom. I also learned that when writing numbers two-digit numbers, you must write the numbers instead of writing out the word. Also, a fourth period in an ellipse means the list goes on but it is done. When citing a name the first time, you must write out the full name. Every time after that you can just right their last name like writing Rev. Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. and just writing King.

    Claims should be concise, informative, and flow together. Our Op-Ed first draft is due by November 7.

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  19. 10/31/2019 Notes
    Housekeeping
    – Ask for feedback on Writing Plan to help turn it into an Op-Ed
    Riddle
    – A quiz is posted by the NY Times to test our editing skills. We go over the several passages from Times articles with multiple grammatical errors and correct them.
    Our LTE on Booing the President
    – We take a look at the two published Letters to the Editor in response to the “Trump Got Booed” Op-Ed.
    A Little Quiz
    – We will have to correct five grammatically incorrect sentences on our own. This could be finished after class.
    Lecture/Demo: Connecting Claims
    – The professor demonstrates how several individual related but unconnected claims can be connected with transitions and logic to guide readers through an argument.
    Connecting Claims Exercise
    – We will try the techniques demonstrated in Grade Levels and Connecting Claims to guide readers through the claims made a paragraph.

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  20. The riddle for the day was meant to help us edit our own essays for grammatical errors. Our letter to the editor was not published, however we can look at the ones that did make it into press and analyze why they got into print rather than our own. The reason our writing deserves to be in paper is because of the very clear point of view on the subject. A short quiz was given out on how to fix modifiers in sentences. Short sentences were given and we had to fix them so the modifier correctly modified. Our arguments are sometimes choppy and not very clear as to where they are going, so an example of an argument is given and we must work on it to make it more clear so that us readers can see where our arguments going.

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  21. athenapup4 says:

    10/31 Notes
    Riddle: completed the 10 sentences containing grammatical errors and fixed them as a class.
    Who/ whom — he/him
    Its a six-foot-tall fence is correct
    The fence is six- feet tall is wrong it doesn’t need a hyphen
    “As well as” isn’t used to replace “and”
    One two three four…
    Use numerals when its 2-digits or more (10,11,12)
    … means there’s more to come
    ….means there’s more to come but im going to stop here.
    LTE
    The first time you mention someone’s name, you say the whole, the second time you mention someone’s name you only use the last name.
    Connecting claims lesson.

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  22. bestbaker123 says:

    Notes for Halloween!:
    – Riddle was interesting because we were thought how little small errors are made in NYT articles that can be extremely over looked and are made everyday by even professional writers.
    – When to use who and whom: If you can replace the subject with “he” and it sounds right, then you can use who. If you can replace the subject with “him” and it sounds right, then you use whom.
    – When to write out the numbers instead of with digits: After double digits, you don’t write the numbers out.
    – When trying to establish credibility, good grammar can make a huge difference.
    – Connecting Claims: When writing out an argument, don’t just list your claims and go along with it. You should state your stance in the first sentence or so, and then use connected claims to make a strong argument. Use moral imperatives like “should,” “should not’, “although.”
    – Transition your claims into smooth flowing paragraphs.
    – In one week, the writing plan will be turned into a draft of an Op-Ed.

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  23. iamsleepy01 says:

    – read LTEs on the article “Booing the President” and discuss how they make it into print. Make sure you’re clear on which side you’re on. Don’t be afraid to be bold and voice out your real opinion.
    – Short quiz to fix the sentence(modifiers)
    – Connecting Claims- State claims clearly, connect them to the sentence.

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