Editorial Draft – Sub2MigzFilms

Why is the Right Threatened by Sixteen-Year-Old Greta Thunberg?

Greta Thunberg has become the voice of thousands of young climate activists who are fighting to save the planet from global warming. The protest began in September in New York City where Greta became the keynote speaker to the rise in action. Her strike against climate change soon spread through more cities across the globe, making one small group of protesters into millions.

Sixteen-year-old Greta Thunberg’s fight to bring awareness to climate change began around a year ago. Greta could not ignore the evidence of the rise in global temperature and the heavily increased amount of carbon dioxide in our atmosphere. With sea levels quickly rising, and the ice drastically melting, Greta chose to strike from school every Friday as a form of protest. She needed the attention of global leaders who could help save the planet for future generations.

Her effort to bring awareness to the climate crisis, however, did not come without backlash. Many rightists seem to believe her protest has only spread unnecessary anxiety to many young teens. Supposedly, a large portion of people under 35 now believe we will be in the brink of extinction in 10-15 years due to her protest. Of course, who can argue with a bias polling that had only a few responses to choose from, and was made by a rightist. We are not anxious, we are angered by the lack of action we have received by world leaders. The belief that climate change should not be our main priority because it will not cause extinction in this lifetime, is extremely disheartening. We may not be in danger of extinction as of now, but studies have shown that the Earth, although not inhabitable, cannot be saved in 12 years from today.

Republicans have accused Greta and other young activists of being ungrateful. Greta has held older generations responsible for “failing us,” and the response she is given is a list of percentages, such as higher life expectancy and an increased rate of primary school completion that has been granted to us by the help of past generations. Unfortunately, what Greta means when she says they have failed us is that none of these privileges mean anything when the future here on Earth is not being saved.

What we hope to achieve now is to spread the message Greta has been trying to send and make our voices heard. Global warming should not be taken lightly. It is the future of our planet that is in need of saving. Showing support for the movement on social media and signing petitions to help the cause are actions many should take. With presidential elections right around the corner as well, being informed on who supports the fight against global warming is exceedingly important.

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4 Responses to Editorial Draft – Sub2MigzFilms

  1. tenere84 says:

    Just a few grammar errors:

    PAR2:
    – We are not anxious, we are angered by the lack of action we have received by world leaders.
    You should replace the comma with a period or semicolon. You cannot separate two different complete thoughts by a comma.

    – Of course who can argue with a bias polling that had only a few responses to choose from, and was made by a rightist.
    should be changed to something like:
    “Of course, who can argue with a biased polling that included only a few responses to choose from and was made by a rightist?”

    PAR3:
    – Greta has held older generations responsible for “failing us,” and the response she is given is a list of percentages, such as higher life expectancy and an increased rate of primary school completion that has been granted to us by the help of past generations.
    This is a run-on sentence. Best to split these ideas into two. Overall though, it’s a bit confusing. I’m not sure what to say about this one other than that you should be more clear.

    Now for your argument.

    I think the number one point to make is that your claim isn’t very clear. Are you attacking the “rightists” who attack Thunberg or are you simply showing your support for her? Your title, for example, indicates that Republicans (in general, I assume) should not be threatened by Thunberg’s protests but you do not elaborate on that claim more in the essay.

    You can focus on whichever topic you like, whether it be republicans or just climate change or just Greta Thunberg. But be sure to be clear on what you’re talking about and stay on topic.

    A second point I would like to make about your argument is that there’s not a lot of argument to be found. Upon examination your essay consists of a lot of mere “information,” and quite a few random attacks on the right. Evidence is crucial to supporting your claim, but there’s a clear difference between news articles and editorials.

    A third point: I noticed that, throughout your argument overall, that you project a mild cynicism towards republicans that is unsupported and sometimes irrelevant. I think it’s fine to show a distrust towards Republicans as long as you elaborate on it more and have good reasoning. Otherwise it can be a slippery slope (though mentioning this is also a slippery slope for me because I don’t want to show bias or attack the writer). I advise you to consider the implications of using something like “this was made by a rightist” as a reason to discredit a poll. It’s not a very good support. All I’m saying is you should give more thought and consider other people’s perspectives. It can help you avoid slipping into ad hominem territory.

    That’s all. I hope this helped.

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  2. tenere84 says:

    I’ll be back for peer review.

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  3. mpsj13 says:

    I will be back to peer review.

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    • mpsj13 says:

      Your argument against those who disregard climate change is clear. However, I feel that your argument should focus more on the importance of fighting climate change than on the republicans. The editorial is well written, but I feel that you should focus in on one thing. Overall, it well done. I hope this helps.

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