Robust Verbs–drpaleontology

A huge problem exists in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. Crime rates soar due to the addicts present in the city. Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. No limits exist as to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem still exists in which the addicts cannot be forced off of their substances such as heroin. The only accomplishment that this program is trying to complete is to drop the crime rates by these addicts. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. The hospitals find it pointless to have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

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1 Response to Robust Verbs–drpaleontology

  1. davidbdale says:

    You left behind both “By” errors. Three of your last four sentences begin with “This.” You replaced three “is” verbs with “exists.” Not enough improvement over the original.


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