Original: There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.
Edited: The “free heroin for addicts” program in Vancouver is doing everything they can to stop the addicts from committing crimes. These addicts have a hard time getting through their daily lives and activities. They have trouble maintaining their jobs, basic interactions and relationships because of their addiction. Heroin addicts will do anything to get their hands on the drug, including stealing and also, breaking and entering. The problem with this program is that it won’t get the addicts to stop abusing the drug. The purpose of the program to save the city from the crimes committed by the addicts. By providing the drug, the addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will lower the crime rate. The benefit is that it will also keep the addicts out of the hospital. The hospital shouldn’t have to deal with people that can’t cope without the drug and who can’t afford the hospital bills. The program provides the heroin to the addicts in the safest way possible. However, this will only fix the city’s rising crime rate while doing nothing to help the addiction of the user.
Strong work. Fixed problems but without creating fluency and argument sentences. This error unfixed: By providing the drug, the addicts will be off the streets.