LTE for Portfolio—hershey

 Re: “Yes, Texting While Walking Is Relatively Safe. (But Still Annoying”)

(Article, Sep. 6 2019)

Texting and Walking Is Unsafe

To the Editor:

Michael Gold’s 2019 narrow-minded article regarding texting and walking claims that statistics show that walking and texting does not cause any harm to individuals. He states how there is no concrete evidence showing that texting and walking can cause fatalities. In perspective of his claim as a college student at Rowan University, I have experienced instances whereby I have seen students who have walked to class while texting which is a distraction. Students are constantly rushing to class to try and make it on time. Somehow they remain attached to their phone which causes them to bump into others accidently. People mumble “Im sorry”, as they mistakenly walk into another person due to lack of awareness. According to National Data, “Distracted walking is a very minor contributor to pedestrian death”. I disagree because if something takes away your attention, you are no longer fully aware of your surroundings.

A study from “Harvard Business Review”, says that “only 2% of people can multitask successfully”. If one cannot multitask, then how can texting while walking be safer. People lose their lives too often due to texting while driving, since they believe they are multitasking. Micheal then complains that texting while walking is “annoying”. Texting while walking is not only annoying, but dangerous. Studies should be proving why there should be an end to texting while walking, not how others cannot be harmed. The goal in today’s society should be try to lower less casualties all together.

As society progresses, we should be focusing on how to make the world a safer and better place. We should not be finding excuses to support unreasonable behavior. The short time one takes to walk from one place to another is not worth putting themselves in harms way. In the following articles, I hope for Michael Gold to restate his illogical claim. We should decrease texting while walking, instead of arguing it should be considered as “harmful” instead of “annoying”.

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2 Responses to LTE for Portfolio—hershey

  1. hershey515 says:

    Thank you so much for the feedback and I have been trying to email you but for some reason it isn’t going through. My first draft I reposted onto the right page from it being a separate post. I will certainly take your feedback into recognition thank you again. Is it to late to repost this draft again with the feedback given?

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  2. davidbdale says:

    Michael Gold’s 2019 narrow-minded article regarding texting and walking claims that statistics show that walking and texting does not cause any harm to individuals. He states how there is no concrete evidence showing that texting and walking can cause fatalities. In perspective of his claim as a college student at Rowan University, I have experienced instances whereby I have seen students who have walked to class while texting which is a distraction. Students are constantly rushing to class to try and make it on time. Somehow they remain attached to their phone which causes them to bump into others accidently. People mumble “Im sorry”, as they mistakenly walk into another person due to lack of awareness. According to National Data, “Distracted walking is a very minor contributor to pedestrian death”. I disagree because if something takes away your attention, you are no longer fully aware of your surroundings.

    Hershey, you haven’t asked for feedback on this draft, but I want to share an observation I hope you’ll appreciate. Your wordiness takes all the energy from your claims. I’ve consolidated your work into more energetic sentences.

    Michael Gold’s 2019 narrow-minded article claims there’s no evidence that walking and texting causes injury or fatalities. As a student at Rowan University, I have watched many oblivious students bump into others while texting as they rushed to class, even while crossing busy streets! According to National Data, while texting certainly reduces awareness of our surroundings, “Distracted walking is a very minor contributor to pedestrian death.”

    I’m not sure how you can dispute the statistics you and Gold both cite, hershey, but we’ll leave that question for another time.
    Helpful?
    1. Please leave a Comment to indicate your reaction.
    2. Feel free to follow the Feedback Please technique to request more interference after you’ve made significant revisions. I very quickly learn to ignore students who do not engage in the recursive feedback process.

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