Editorial for Portfolio – best baker

The Plastic Problem

Next time you order a drink, ask yourself if you need a plastic straw to go with it. The answer should always be no. Plastic straws should never be used because they are toxic to the human body and animals, and are harmful to the ocean, and the environment, which is why we should use ban it and use safer alternatives such as bamboo, metal, and paper straws.

Plastic straws have slowly been acknowledged as a problem and many establishments such as Dig Inn, Starbucks, and Soho House are working to become plastic straw free as soon as possible. The city of New York is also thinking about banning plastic straws altogether, saying that plastic straws are not the only option. Instead of using plastic, they would adopt the use of paper straws, aluminum straws and bamboo straws. They would be right to do so. In recent news, it was disclosed that every piece of plastic that has been used, sheds into tiny chemicals which go into our body and our food. Plastic straws are not biodegradable, meaning they are not capable of being decomposed by bacteria or other living organisms, to become a harmless substance. This proves to be deadly and toxic to us as human beings.

Most single use straws are made from polypropylene, a type of plastic that is commonly made from petroleum. Chemicals from polypropylene can leach into liquids and they may release compounds that affect estrogen levels. Plastic straws may not seem to be doing visible damage to our bodies, but they are in fact harmful.

Not only are humans a target of the toxicity of plastic straws, but animals are in just as much danger. The pollution on our beaches is waste combined overtime to create/form a type of bacteria in which spreads illnesses. Beach pollution harms the wildlife immensely. Marine mammals, sea turtles and sea birds can even consume plastic waste. There have been many instances where a sea turtle has consumed a plastic straw or a straw has went through it’s nostril, leading it to a painful and slow death. Millions of these animals die each year from complications directly related to plastic consumption.

Plastic straws are also proven to be harmful to the environment which we should protect at all costs. Straws are particularly known to end up in our bodies of water, and also littering our beaches. Most plastic straws that lay around on the beach just break down into even smaller particles, which release chemicals into the soil and air we breathe. This is clearly harmful to everyone in the environment, which is why it should be prevented. Miami Beach set a great example of helping to get rid of this problem by banning plastic straws and stirrers citywide. In September 2019, the city prohibited single-use plastic beverage straws to reduce the amount of plastic pollution in the city’s waterways. Steps like these will help make the world a plastic straw free place sooner rather than later.

In order to stop plastic straws from harming us and our environment any further, we must ban them altogether. It would be the best step to take. Plastic straws should be banned for our own wellbeing and they should be replaced with more eco-friendly alternatives such as reusable stainless steel straws, glass straws, bamboo and paper straws. We must act as a community to band together and not use plastic straws. We must use our freedom of speech and use our voice to get the nation to understand that banning plastic straws is the only way to save our environment and everyone in it. We must try to end the plastic problem.

 

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3 Responses to Editorial for Portfolio – best baker

  1. davidbdale says:

    I won’t say I was persuaded, Baker, but that’s a different question from “Is my argument persuasive?” For the most part, it is, and I shouldn’t expect much more than that, but since I know you want to do your best, I have some suggestions for improving your persuasiveness. (And many more suggestions on other matters, but I’m limiting my response to answering your question.)

    1. Clarify exactly what you mean by “pollution.” It seems obvious, I guess, but casually using words we think are obvious creates trouble. Is a trash-strewn city street and example of pollution? Most would say no. So, why is a trash-strewn beach pollution?

    2. While you’re working on that, you might have to divide the noxious effects of plastic straws into specific categories and address them in sequence. You confuse this reader by switching back and forth among A) gross physical harm like choking on a whole straw, and B) ingestion of broken-down microplastics, and C) toxic chemical leaching from “in-use” plastic, and D) toxic chemical leaching from discarded plastic.

    3. Once you have them organized, you’ll have to spell out the damage. It will only take a few words each. A) For example, why are microplastics a problem for sea life? Do they “eat” them just by swallowing sea water? Don’t they just pass them out as waste? Or do they accumulate in the stomach and intestines, for example, until there’s no room for actual food, causing malnourishment? Or what? B) For another example, how does that make microplastics harmful to humans? Surely we’re not eating them. How would they get into our bodies? You seem to suggest they’re a problem for us, but suggesting is not enough.

    4. You “talk about” noxious chemicals several times but without naming any or the diseases they cause.

    In general, you touch on the right topics for sure, Baker, but you seem satisfied with naming what sound like problems instead of detailing the danger.

    Was that too harsh? Or does it help you focus on the next step? I think you’ll find you won’t need a single additional word to add the details I’m recommending. You’ll save words by staying with each item for a sentence or two instead of circling back to the same material repeatedly. And you can cut your conclusion in half, or even more, because we don’t really need to be reminded what you said 300 words earlier.

    OK? Helpful?

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  2. bestbaker123 says:

    I would just like to know if my editorial is effective in persuading you to believe my argument. Thanks Prof!

    Like

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