Alcohol In Stages
The current national drinking age in the United States is 21 years old. According to “The Alcohol Rehab Guide”, 80% of college students have consumed alcohol to some degree. Given the relatively known fact that underage drinking is overly abused by teens and those under the drinking age, why is the government still enforcing the 21 year old requirement if it’s constantly being ignored?
Take driving a car for example. The day you turn of age to drive, you are not thrown into a vehicle alone and expected to know what to do. There are steps to get teens adapted to driving and doing it safely. Schools and businesses provide classes and courses to inform you of rules and regulations before getting behind the wheel. There are two separate stages to becoming a fully licensed driver. At first you are prohibited to certain amounts of people in the car, hours allowed to drive, and must be accompanied by an adult. Drinking on the other hand, has no means of preparation. At age 21, you are given the opportunity to drink freely with no practice and without the awareness of personal limits.
There should be similar laws for drinking as there is for driving. Teens the age of 18 should be legally allowed to consume alcohol when under supervision of someone 21 or older. Whereas once you turn the age of 21 you have the freedom to drink alcohol without supervision. In addition, being aware of your body’s limitations and self control. Enforcing a new law to educate and introduce teens into drinking at the age of 18 would be a higher benefit rather than throwing them the legal ability to drink completely at 21.
Allowing supervised drinking at 18 is not an absurd vision for a new law in the United States. Other countries such as Italy, Germany, Spain, France, etc have drinking ages from 16-18 years old. In America, there are a plethora of actions legal at age 18. You have the right to vote, enlist in the military, go to prison, purchase a house, and adopt a child. It is not a far stretch to change drinking laws in order to help teens become familiar with alcohol usage in safe manner.
I think the topic of your editorial is very interesting and intriguing. I think the that the second paragraph is kind of off topic in that your explanation is too long and might turn people away. Your last paragraph shows readers that what you are proposing is not a far fetched idea and bringing in what other countries laws are was impactful. You also did a good job giving an option to support your opinion on why a new law should take place.
I’ll be back to write a peer review on this one.
Would love some feedback on if I’m on tract or even writing a editorial.
Briefly, Cookie, Editorials arise from the news of the day. The Editors could write every day about hundreds of topics, but they don’t; they respond to something that occurred: a social event, a national emergency, a new piece of legislation, a pending catastrophe, etc. So you’ll need to find a trigger that prompted this piece of opinion. More than merely justifying your pontification, the news article or other item will help focus your position by giving you something specific to react to.
[side note]: when I was an 18-20-year-old in Ohio, I benefited from a provision of state law that permitted 18-year-olds to buy and consume “near-beer,” as we described it, specially packaged beer with a 3.2% alcohol content. I have no idea whether such a law still exists, but it would bolster your argument if it does.
Put this back into Feedback Please if you want more advice following your next batch of significant revisions.