A Little Quiz

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Copy and paste the sentences into a Reply field below. Edit or rewrite the sentences to correct any modifier errors you find. Make the smallest changes possible that correct the error. Leave any correct sentences alone.

THE QUIZ

  1. A dog appeared in my dream that seemed to have my father’s eyes.
  2. The assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts while biting his nails.
  3. Even wearing a helmet, a bicycle can still be quite dangerous.
  4. With forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
  5. Walter preferred female singer-songwriters unlike his sister.
  6. By booing the Commissioner at the ball park, he was embarrassed.

 

53 Responses to A Little Quiz

  1. bestbaker123 says:

    1. A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even riders wear a helmet.
    4. With forty years of experience; you can trust us to provide quality care.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed at the ball park after he was booed.

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  2. lelebxby says:

    1. A dog that appeared in my dream had my father’s eyes.

    2. The assistant was biting his nails while watching the mechanic assemble the engine parts.

    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even while the rider is wearing a helmet.

    4. With forty years of experience, we promise you quality care.

    5. Unlike his sister, Walter proffered female singer-songwriters.

    6. After the Commissioner was booed at the ball park, he was embarrassed.

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  3. 1. A dog appeared that appeared in my dream seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2.The assistant, biting his nails, watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can be dangerous even while someone is wearing a helmet.
    4. Forty years of experience guarantees quality care from us.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. Booing the commissioner at the ballpark resulted in his embarrassment.

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  4. tenere84 says:

    1. A dog that appeared in my dream seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2. The assistant bit his nails as he watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. Even when wearing a helmet, riding a bicycle can be quite dangerous.
    4. With forty years of experience, we can be trusted for quality care.
    5. Walter preferred female singer-songwriters to his sister.
    6. When the commissioner was booed at the ballpark, he was embarrassed.

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  5. ahntkd99 says:

    1. A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    2.While biting is nail, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed by booing at ballpark.

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  6. lg102015 says:

    1.My fathers eyes appeared through a dog in my dream.
    2. While bitting his nails, t he assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, while even wearing a helmet.
    4. you can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience,
    5. Walter preferred female singer-songwriters unlike his sister.
    6. He was embarrassed, by booing the Commissioner at the ball park.

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    • davidbdale says:

      *father’s
      1. “appeared through a dog”?
      3. Your bike needs a rider, or your helmet needs a wearer.
      4. Needs a semicolon.
      5. Still means he likes singers who are NOT LIKE his sister.
      6. Sounds like he booed the Commissioner and was embarrassed to have done so.

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  7. voxpopuli75 says:

    A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    The assistant bit his nails while he watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even when wearing a helmet.
    We have forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    The commissioner was embarrassed because of people booing him at the ballpark.

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  8. Jayv23 says:

    1. A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even when wearing a helmet.
    4. With forty years of experience, we provide you with quality care.
    5. unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed at the ball park because he was being booed.

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  9. In my dream, a dog appeared that seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    The assistant, while biting his nails, watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even if the rider is wearing a helmet.
    We have forty years of experience, so you can trust us for quality care.
    Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    The Commissioner was embarrassed when being booed at the ball park.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Very nice throughout, Doughnut.
      Unique solutions too, which is refreshing.

      Just one thing, your Commissioner in your sentence isn’t necessarily embarrassed BY the booing (just during the booing).

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  10. 1. A dog that appeared in my dream with my fathers eyes.
    2. Biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine.
    3 A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even when the rider is wearing a helmet.
    4. Our forty years of experience, gives you trust for quality care.
    5. Unlike my sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. By booing the commissioner at the ball park the fans embarrassed him.

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    • davidbdale says:

      1. Your version makes me realize for the first time that the dog might simply OWN your father’s eyes; they aren’t necessarily in the dog’s eye sockets. (Not your fault; just an observation)
      3, 4, and 6 are very innovative; I’ve seen nothing quite like them in your classmates’ work.
      5. Not YOUR sister, Walter’s sister.

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  11. ajuuy7 says:

    1.A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes appeared in my dream.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even if the rider is wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. By booing the commissioner at the ball park, the fans embarrassed him.

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  12. jackso23 says:

    1. A dog appeared and seemed to have my father’s eyes in my dream
    2. The assistant bit his nails and watched while the mechanic assemble the engine parts
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even with a rider wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience
    5. Walter, unlike his sister, preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed by the booing at the ball park.

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  13. mpsj13 says:

    1. In my dream a dog appeared that seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. Riding a bicycle can still be quite dangerous even if a rider is wearing a helmet.
    4. We have forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed by being booed at the ball park.

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  14. yankeefan25 says:

    1. In my dream a dog appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic.
    3. Even while wearing a helmet, bicycles can be dangerous.
    4. You can trust us for quality care, because we have forty years of experience.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The commissioner was embarrassed while being booed at the ballpark.

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    • davidbdale says:

      3. Your bicycles are wearing a helmet.
      4. Beautiful except the comma is an error.
      6. To indicate that the booing (instead of something else) embarrassed him, you need to say he was embarrassed BY the booing not DURING the booing.

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  15. lucbe219 says:

    1. A dog that appeared in my dream seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2. The nail biting assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even while wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us for quality care due to our forty years of experience.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner at the ball park was embarrassed by being booed.

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    • davidbdale says:

      2. I love the nail-biting assistant. Unique and quite correct.
      3. Your bicycle is wearing a helmet.
      4. “Due to” is hard to use correctly (wrong here) for pissy technical reasons. “Because of” is much safer.
      6. Your stuff is good enough I feel I can nitpick. You could be referring to one of many Commissioners, this one the one at the ball park.

      Otherwise very strong.

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  16. A dog appeared in my dream, and it seemed to have my father’s eyes.

    The assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts while he was biting his own nails.

    Even when you wear a helmet, a bicycle can still be quite dangerous.

    You can trust us for quality care because of our forty years of experience,.

    Walter preferred female singer-songwriters, his sister shares a different opinion.

    By booing the Commissioner at the ball park, the man was embarrassed.

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    • davidbdale says:

      2. Doesn’t solve the problem. The mechanic might still be the nail-biter.
      3. Good that you added a helmet wearer (you), but now YOU might not be riding the bike. (Yes . . . very picky.) How about: Bike-riding is dangerous even when the biker wears a helmet.
      4. Brilliant.
      5. Innovative. Needs a semicolon. Also, she doesn’t SHARE that opinion. The point of the sentence is that she and Walter DON’T share a preference.
      6. Nope. In your version, the man (not the Commissioner) is embarrassed.

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  17. 1. A dog in my dream seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2. The assistant bit his nails while he watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even if the rider is wearing a helmet.
    4. We have forty years of experience, you can trust us.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed after being booed at the ballpark.

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  18. kraemercali says:

    1. A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.

    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.

    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even when wearing a helmet.

    4. Due to forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.

    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.

    6. The commissioner was embarrassed by people booing him at the ballpark.

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  19. smellycat23 says:

    A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes, appeared in my dream.
    The assistant was biting his nails as he watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    Even wearing a helmet while riding a bike, can still be quite dangerous.
    With forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    Walter, unlike his sister, preferred female singer-songwriters.
    The Commissioner at the ballpark was embarrassed from being booed at.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Good work. Some unique solutions.
      1. no comma.
      2. clean
      3. no comma. Also, in your version WEARING A HELMET is STILL QUITE DANGEROUS. Not what you meant.
      6. “Embarrassed from” is odd. “Embarrassed by being booed”?

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  20. iamsleepy01 says:

    1) A dog in my dreams seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2) While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine.
    3) Even wearing a helmet, riding a bicycle can still be quite dangerous.
    4) With forty years of experience, we provide you with quality care.
    5) Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6) The Commissioner was embarrassed by being booed at the ballpark.

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  21. hershey515 says:

    1. A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes, appeared in my dreams
    2. While voting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even while wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us with quality care, with over forty years of experience.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer song-writers
    6. The commission was embarrassed because of the people booing at the ballpark

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    • davidbdale says:

      1. no comma.
      2. “biting” his nails
      3. Your bicycle is wearing a helmet.
      4. Sounds as if the quality care has forty years experience. The comma doesn’t solve that misunderstanding.
      5. singer-songwriters
      6. This says the booing embarrassed him, but it DOESN’T say that the fans were booing the Commissioner.

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  22. lovericeandnoodles says:

    A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes appeared in my dream.
    The assistant watched the mechanic assembling the engine and biting his nails.
    A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even if a helmet is worn.
    With forty years of experience, we can be trusted for quality care.
    Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    The booing embarrassed the Commissioner at the ball park.

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    • davidbdale says:

      I LOVE the brevity and forward drive of these sentences, RiceNoodles.
      They’re not all unambiguous, but they’re beautiful.
      I’m going to suggest some alternatives that “king” your checkers.

      A dog with my father’s eyes appeared in my dream.
      The nail-biting assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine.
      Bicycle riding is dangerous even for riders wearing helmets.
      Our forty years of experience guarantee quality care.
      Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
      Being booed at the ball park embarrassed the Commissioner.

      These are a cheat on the instruction to “make the smallest changes possible,” but they are surely the smallest sentences possible. Thought you might appreciate them.

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  23. 1. A dog in my dream had my father’s eyes.
    2. The assistant, while biting his nails, watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even wearing a helmet.
    4. With forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed because he was booed at the ball park.

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  24. bane1900 says:

    A dog in my dream seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    The assistant watched, while biting his nails, as the mechanic assemble the engine parts
    A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even when wearing a helmet.
    With forty years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    Walter preferred female singer-songwriters unlike his sister.
    The Commissioner was embarrassed by booing at the ball park.

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    • davidbdale says:

      3. Your bike is wearing a helmet.
      5. Doesn’t solve the problem. The singer-songwriters are still NOT LIKE his sister in your version.
      6. Does not indicate that the booing was booing OF THE COMMISSIONER.

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  25. athenapup4 says:

    1. A dog appeared in my dream that seemed to have my father’s eyes.
    2. The assistant, while biting his nails, watched the mechanic assemble the engine’s parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous, even wearing a helmet.
    4. With 40 years of experience, you can trust us for quality care.
    5. Walter preferred female singers/songwriters, unlike his sister.
    6. After booing the Commissioner at the ball park, he felt embarrassed.

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    • davidbdale says:

      1. Your dream has eyes.
      3. Your bicycle is wearing a helmet.
      4. YOU, not the company, have 40 years experience.
      5. The comma helps, but not as well as other solutions.
      6. Who’s HE? Your sentence does not say. But your sentence makes clear that HE is not the Commissioner. Not what you intended.

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  26. morra2024 says:

    1. A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes appeared in my dream.
    2. The assistant watched the mechanic assembling the engine and biting his nails.
    3. A bicycle can still be quite dangerous even if a helmet is worn.
    4. With forty years of experience, we can be trusted for quality care.
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The booing embarrassed the Commissioner at the ball park.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Strong entries. Interesting choices.
      2. That’s a busy mechanic.
      3. The passive helps, but it could still be the bike wearing the helmet since you have no rider.
      6. I like the brevity, but booing in your sentence isn’t necessarily the Commissioner being booed. That’s a loss.

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  27. comp0327 says:

    1. A dog that seemed to have my father’s eyes appeared in my dream.

    2. The assistant bit his nails while watching the mechanic assemble the engine parts.

    3. Even when wearing a helmet, a bicycle can still be quite dangerous.

    4. You can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience.

    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.

    6. The Commissioner was embarrassed at the ball park because he was being booed.

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  28. doglover441 says:

    1. A dog in my dream appeared to have my father’s eyes.
    2. While biting his nails, the assistant watched the mechanic assemble the engine parts.
    3. A bicycle can still be dangerous even when wearing a helmet.
    4. You can trust us for quality care, we have forty years of experience
    5. Unlike his sister, Walter preferred female singer-songwriters.
    6. The commissioner was embarrassed because people booing at the ballpark.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Nice work, DogLover.
      3. Your bicycle is wearing a helmet.
      4. Needs a semicolon.
      6. What we lose in your version is that the boos were directed at the Commissioner. Yours doesn’t specify.

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