LTE Draft–andrewbecharaa

Suicide cows are a strange, but effective way to intimidate areas for ISIS to strike next. What I do not understand is how the Islamic state is lacking manpower to terrorize the areas themselves. To me, i feel as if this tactic is wasteful because there is no real strategy or point. Furthermore, as stated by the editor, cows are worth around $1,200 so that in itself is a waste of money and resources that the cows could have been used for. The article also talks about how ISIS will continue to breach these areas that could be strategic for movement, but these farms that the cows are in are not valuable areas for the Islamic State at all. ISIS will want to target cities and places with officials residing in them. These farms with working people growing food are only harming the Islamic State when they could be benefiting from all the farmland and resources created.

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3 Responses to LTE Draft–andrewbecharaa

  1. davidbdale says:

    AB, you’ve left yourself plenty of room for improvement.

    I find it hard to imagine that you followed the link I left in my Comment of SEP 08 and found there nothing to help you improve this early draft, so I conclude you haven’t tried to revise it or seek advice from the resources of the blog.

    So let’s jump in.

    Your post doesn’t meet the basic requirements of a Letter to the Editor that are spelled out in the lecture and assignment materials. It doesn’t name an article, editorial, or Op-Ed piece, doesn’t name an author, doesn’t name the date of the original publication or provide a link to the original to help your reader gain the needed background to understand your reaction.

    All we can tell about the original is that “the editor” places the price of a cow at $1200 and that they are somehow used strategically by ISIS.

    I honestly can’t tell if farmers are booby-trapping their cows or whether ISIS is, and the only reason I’m considering that odd notion is that you call them “suicide cows.”

    I can’t provide useful feedback for you until you clearly identify the article you’re referencing, purposefully summarize the original author’s position, contradict or refute one or more positions taken by the original author, and present your own contradictory position with evidence.

    Please return to to see a thorough feedback session that responds to a full and compliant draft.

    When you’ve substantially revised your post, you can place it into the new Feedback Please category to alert me that it needs my attention. Thanks!


  2. davidbdale says:

    Fix your slug and your title, please AB, and give a good look to the feedback session we reviewed in class. I don’t think you want me reviewing this post as the first version of your LTE. It should be identified as LTE Draft—andrewbecharaa.


  3. davidbdale says:

    I appreciate that you’ve posted an early draft of this assignment, AB. Instead of commenting directly on it here, I’d like to draw your attention to a feedback session taking place on the early draft of a classmate. What I have to say on that draft may help you considerably as you work on revisions before the Monday midnight deadline.


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